One day

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Vanja Valentic
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One day

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One day

If I only have one day.
Maybe it will be enough.
To talk.
To run.
To get lost in your eyes.

No, one day will never be enough, I also need one night.
To watch at the stars.
To hold hands under their light.
To kiss until sunlight.

Please God give me that one day I will make it enough,
Even if I have to sacrifice the night.

-V.A.V
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Post by Emma Jane Grey »

This is beautiful, Vanja :) (though just a heads up that it should be either “To look at the stars” or “To watch the stars” as “To watch at the stars” isn’t correct English)
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“… it is enough to exist in the world and marvel at it. You don’t need to justify that, or earn it. You are allowed to just live. That is all most animals do.” ~ Becky Chambers, A Psalm for the Wild-Built
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Post by Vanja Valentic »

Thank you 😭. It does need some tweaking, I wrote that one 2 years ago. I will do better next time posting my poems. I appreciate your time for replying💗
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