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Dear v.i.p

Posted: 01 May 2016, 20:58
by ncoard
your love spreads along your heart,
through your bones,
along your arms.
spreading like warm butter on bread.
your love spreads across your face,
you look more tired now,
more than you did before.

but i’m glad you’re still you.
still here.

your love spreads a lot like dying.
maybe it is.
maybe you are dying.
maybe this is the first time i’ve let myself write it down.
maybe i’m still not ready for it to be real.

do you remember that puzzle we did?
we put the whole world together with our own hands.
now it feels like it’s falling apart.

you will be missed, you will be loved.
don’t ever think we’ll leave you behind.

Re: Dear v.i.p

Posted: 02 May 2016, 04:44
by DATo
A beautiful and poignant poem. I like the phrasing of the first stanza as well as the metaphor of the puzzle in the fourth.

Nice poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Re: Dear v.i.p

Posted: 02 May 2016, 04:51
by LauraBeth0625
Beautiful words ! This is the first poem I have read on this site, and I'm glad I did.
Good Job! Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Re: Dear v.i.p

Posted: 11 May 2016, 20:41
by Heidiannemurray
Loved it! Good job, very heartfelt! I just read your other poem a few minutes ago, you're very talented.

Re: Dear v.i.p

Posted: 12 May 2016, 09:17
by Vermont Reviews
Great job on the poem. Well written. Keep up the great work. You should put together a book and upload to Amazon or Smashwords.