It was just a Flu

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Abigail09
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It was just a Flu

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The Flu came and overwhelmed me .
It felt like where I always wanted to be
All I could see was us together
The birds chirping sounds like the rhythm of a song made it more beautiful
I felt like I was doing something right for once.
I fell in love with the ONE
...and then, He changed..
I waited for his call , I waited for him to check on me.
None of that happened.
I was now the one paddling the canoe
Waiting and hoping for things to go back to the way it was before.
But it didn't.
He was now healed ,no longer infected by the Flu
I wish it wasn't the Flu .
Never again would I mistake the Flu for Love
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Abigail09 wrote:The Flu came and overwhelmed me .
It felt like where I always wanted to be
All I could see was us together
The birds chirping sounds like the rhythm of a song made it more beautiful
I felt like I was doing something right for once.
I fell in love with the ONE
...and then, He changed..
I waited for his call , I waited for him to check on me.
None of that happened.
I was now the one paddling the canoe
Waiting and hoping for things to go back to the way it was before.
But it didn't.
He was now healed ,no longer infected by the Flu
I wish it wasn't the Flu .
Never again would I mistake the Flu for Love
Excellent poetry

says Vermont Reviews
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Thanks
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Wow, very nice! The title caught my attention, and I'm glad I read it! :)
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Thank you
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