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I’m scared. I’m scared. I’m scared. I’m scared.

It sounds like a confession, like an apology to some god that has never shown me any reason to beg for forgiveness.

I’m scared and weak and I forgot how to breathe alone.

This is supposed to be the story about the girl who dreamed who made the world her own,

but all I’ve done is fear and fear and fall.

This particularly resonated with me, but I think it could use (perhaps) a bit more of a rebuttal of the question, "Is that such a bad thing?" If you're looking to expand the poem, maybe do so after the second line. Delve into the idea of why it has to sound like an apology.

I actually really like this and think it would be cool if you were to expand it more. As in make it a little longer because I think the concept you have for this is really great.

This felt deeply personal. I don't believe it needs to be longer- it sounds and feels like those quick, desperate thoughts one thinks during a panic attack.
Which is a compliment, I mean to say.

I throughly enjoyed this. As it is and/or if you expanded it carries a deep meaning. Without a definition of your fear it has the ability to relate to each individual differently and that is the best way to write or read a poem in my own personal opinion. I believe that this can be adopted into every beings life and they "alone" can give it definition through your foundation. Beautiful. Raw. Fantastic job!

Latoshia

This is a deep poem. I think that it can resonate with a lot of people.

It will resonate with many people. Screaming your scared quietly, I like it.