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There's a theory that reality is just a projection of our consciousness.
If that's the case it explains why I'm trapped by my own skin.
What if our consciousness was just a projection of reality?
That would mean that I'm trapped by my own mind.
Perhaps I just need to wake up, or go to sleep.
I just want to go to sleep!
Defeat is so easy when you don't even know you're fighting, and I've been fighting nothing for a long time.
Nothing can't die and it certainly can't bleed
I can bleed for it
the best I can hope for is that nothing will slink away into the shadows with a melancholy hiss
but what if I'm already in the darkness?
where can nothing slink to?
maybe it's me who has to do the slinking,
back into cold sunlight, a snake in the winter
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I think this is very well done--thank you for sharing it! I'm curious to know how long you've been writing poetry.
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Thank you for your compliment! I have been doing creative writing since I was 13 so 8 years :)
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Post by MsMartha »

Well,I hope you keep going==you're doing very well!
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