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Day after day and night after night
I can see your struggles
I have watched you fight
Your body is weak
Your mind is poison
The things you speak
The life you've chosen...
So many times you've lost your way
Looking for hope
Learning to pray
The pain in your eyes
The scars on your skin
A part of you dies
The demons' within

Raw and powerful! Once again, much like your last short story, you express yourself simply and that very simplicity adds an additional dimension of reality to the poem. Very well written in my opinion.

Thank you, this was inspired by my nest friend whom I lost to the demon.

fantastic job.as Dato said...very well writen.it's simple but powerful enough.keep it up!

Sorry about your friend:-( Your last line says it all...I enjoyed reading. Thx!

i found it condescending, and angry. but still poetry. i would like to have heard more of your struggle, because no one knows what that person was really going through, and all this does is paints it in a negative and judgmental way, to me. best of luck in your poetry tho.

-- 10 Sep 2016, 19:53 --

forgive me for defending those without a voice <3

Beautifully written. Most addicts dont realize how their addictions effect those around them.

Amazing poem.. I loved it. As mentioned it was so simple, yet to me it brought across such a strong message. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

Excellent job, his is extremely well written. Despite being somewhat simple, it conveys an immense amount of emotion through the words you chose.