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I am not looking for many things
I've been disappointed all my life
In pains I cannot escaped
And mystery I cannot explained

I was born to be a loser
But here I want to change
Because so many things have happened
And my heart cannot bear

You say it was not my fault
And I believe you with my heart
Still to follow the true path
One should made a sacrifice

I am searching for happiness
For once I am truly trying
Because you've told me it was possible
I want to make it right
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Post by Tiff-thebookworm »

Not sure why but this came to me after I read what you wrote. Anything is possible.

I cry away the pain.
I cry away the lose.
I cry away the sorrow.
I cry away your trust.

I ask myself over and over,
what did I do wrong?
Where did I go wrong?
Why do you hate me so?

I tried to be there.
I tried to understand.
I tried to see things,
in your eyes instead.

You thought I was broken.
You thought you damaged me.
You thought I needed you.

As I sit here bottle in hand.
Bat next to my thigh.
Karma always gets her due.
You should be afraid.
Though I walk by day, I treasure my nights with you.
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Post by 5ngela »

Love your poem. It really beautiful
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Thank you. I hope it may help anyone in need.
Though I walk by day, I treasure my nights with you.
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Post by versetab »

Beautiful piece
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That is a good poem.
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Post by Lincoln »

Really great poem, thank you for sharing.
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