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A Shady Kyrielle

Posted: 31 Mar 2017, 14:17
by Christina O Phillips
Everyone has more than one
“the one” in their lives who have made
shadows cast over what could be;
no one can thrive beneath the shade.

In any life there is the one
who got away, we hoped had stayed
longer and they’re held over you;
no one can thrive beneath the shade.

Then there’s the one they never had
a chance to try, a game unplayed;
they get their own pedestal, too;
no one can thrive beneath the shade.

We have the one we end up with
overshadowed by doubts others made
so what chance does that leave us with?
No one can thrive beneath the shade.

Re: A Shady Kyrielle

Posted: 05 Apr 2017, 14:02
by DATo
Very nice kyrielle Christina. I particularly like the second stanza - the effect of one who has gone being as oppressive as the one who stayed (fourth stanza).

oooops! .... second sentence of the last paragraph has 9 syllables. Shhhhhhh, I won't tell anyone *L* How about o'reshadowed ?

Re: A Shady Kyrielle

Posted: 06 Apr 2017, 08:11
by Christina O Phillips
Oops. Oh, well, even with the mistake Writer's Digest still recognized it. :)
But thank you. For future printings, I will probably use "o'reshadowed."

Re: A Shady Kyrielle

Posted: 09 Apr 2017, 11:45
by Jaime Lync
This is quite thought provocative...Nice share.

Re: A Shady Kyrielle

Posted: 09 Apr 2017, 12:19
by Christina O Phillips
Thank you, Jaime. I was nervous to share my work here so it's comforting to get kind replies.