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Quite deceived

Posted: 09 Apr 2017, 11:46
by Jaime Lync
Mouth full of dirt, itchy throat,
loss for words but even if he could describe this, this…
his swollen tonsils wouldn’t let him speak.
Feeling weak, future’s bleak, refuge he seeks
mind Immersed in simple rhymes, remembering simple times
Learning table manners, two times two gives four
seventy times seven sins against another - still forgiven
but now he...
ate deceptive words
and
fell
speechless

Re: Quite deceived

Posted: 09 Apr 2017, 12:53
by rssllue
Interesting change of pace from your other two that I read today. Thus one is sort of rapid fire compared to them. And I also like the biblical parts woven into your poetry. Very cool.

Re: Quite deceived

Posted: 09 Apr 2017, 13:00
by Jaime Lync
Thanks. I love to reference the scriptures in my poetry or at least get the reader thinking about Truth. I'm glad you liked my poems.

Re: Quite deceived

Posted: 09 Apr 2017, 14:51
by rssllue
That is awesome! :D