Memory Beach

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Zzaakkiiyyaa
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Memory Beach

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dig deep into the sands of my memory beach
unearth the pearls that hide,
clamped tight inside the safety of their shell,
but let your breeze whisper its salty secrets there,
and they will open wider than a cave,
you see, you fill this destruction with your sea spray,
those long waves, fill those once smooth sands
they make this beach new again,
your cove is the safest place i have ever been,
my pearls come tumbling at the sight of your mouth,
you understand you could be rich,
but you settle for this disheveled landscape,
of my weakest castles,
for they are made of sand,
and you are the sturdiest cave,
my castles are grateful for your shelter
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This is very thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.
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"..you understand you could be rich, but you settle for this disheveled landscape of my weakest castles.."

This line is so beautiful. Right in the feels.
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
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Zzaakkiiyyaa
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czarmaineam wrote:"..you understand you could be rich, but you settle for this disheveled landscape of my weakest castles.."

This line is so beautiful. Right in the feels.
Thank you so much!

-- 06 Jun 2017, 02:27 --
Jaime Lync wrote:This is very thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you :)
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