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I never
Posted: 07 Jun 2017, 04:50
by Zzaakkiiyyaa
i never wanted to drift through life,
i wanted to tear peoples hearts
in beautiful ways,
make impact,
change the structure of people’s brain tendrils,
i wanted to create laughter, pain, feeling in my words
i needed people to be destroyed, in one way or another
by my voice,
my writing,
my echo,
for I believe feeling is the only way to get through;
for people to understand that -
i am not here lightly
i am a gallant ball of flames
i spew passion from every angle
my fire is not to be distinguished
i’ll roar my way through your forest,
tear it down,
leave the ashes on the ground
as a reminder
that i,
never wanted to drift through life
Re: I never
Posted: 07 Jun 2017, 05:37
by Kelebogile Mbangi
Inspiring! I personally love writing poetry and short stories, your poem makes me want to be more passionate about writing. And its so easy to drift through the motions of life, thanks for sharing this piece!
Re: I never
Posted: 07 Jun 2017, 05:40
by Zzaakkiiyyaa
Kelebogile Mbangi wrote:Inspiring! I personally love writing poetry and short stories, your poem makes me want to be more passionate about writing. And its so easy to drift through the motions of life, thanks for sharing this piece!
Thank you so much for your kind words! It means a lot to me that you liked it. I'm glad this poem inspired you and that you can take something from it. It honestly means the world to me

Re: I never
Posted: 07 Jun 2017, 15:17
by Czarmaine AM
I'm amazed by how you used the same lines in the beginning and end of this poem. I've always wanted to write something like this but I can't seem to find the right words. Good job! thanks for sharing your passion to the world <3
Re: I never
Posted: 07 Jun 2017, 16:40
by Zzaakkiiyyaa
czarmaineam wrote:I'm amazed by how you used the same lines in the beginning and end of this poem. I've always wanted to write something like this but I can't seem to find the right words. Good job! thanks for sharing your passion to the world <3
Thank you so much for your super kind comment

It means a lot to me! You could definitely write something like this! <3
Re: I never
Posted: 01 Sep 2017, 16:50
by Vivian Paschal
I love this poem. It speaks volumes really. In my own four lines, two of which are borrowed from you, and two of which sum up to be a popular saying:
I never wanted to drift through life
I came and I saw
And all I wanted to do was conquer
I never wanted to drift through life.
Thanks for sharing this piece.
PS. I think you might have erred by using distinguished rather than extinguished in line sixteen.