Rotten Fruit
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TobiOrNotTobi
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Rotten Fruit
My beloved, Elpis,
The forbidden fruit is safe,
But you are not.
Why couldn't you stay?
Instead of running away?
My beloved, Elpis,
That lurker from the darkness,
He has taken you away.
Far away to the frontier;
Where you will stay with regret.
My beloved, Elpis,
What have I done wrong
To make things go this way?
A woman has taken the forbidden fruit.
The woman has claimed the forbidden fruit as hers.
My beloved, Elpis,
What do I do now?
The forbidden fruit has returned,
But it's returned rotten,
Just like you.
The forbidden fruit is safe,
But you are not.
Why couldn't you stay?
Instead of running away?
My beloved, Elpis,
That lurker from the darkness,
He has taken you away.
Far away to the frontier;
Where you will stay with regret.
My beloved, Elpis,
What have I done wrong
To make things go this way?
A woman has taken the forbidden fruit.
The woman has claimed the forbidden fruit as hers.
My beloved, Elpis,
What do I do now?
The forbidden fruit has returned,
But it's returned rotten,
Just like you.
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Czarmaine AM
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This could pass as a lyrics in a pop rock song. I can imagine the official music video now. Haha Thank you for sharing this. Loved the change of emotion in every stanza.
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
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TobiOrNotTobi
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czarmaineam wrote:This could pass as a lyrics in a pop rock song. I can imagine the official music video now. Haha Thank you for sharing this. Loved the change of emotion in every stanza.
Haha, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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baley
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Karisma,Darling,
Why,why? Did you risk the fruit?
By so doing you put everything at jeopardy,
So no Justification in spite of pardoning.
Karisma, Darling,
Forbidden fruit, is put at stake,
Now, it's rotten fruit,
Rotten and rotten to the core.
Karisma,Darling,
Did I not give you all I could,
Betrayal has clowned all,
Stay,stay I abandon the rotten fruit.
Why,why? Did you risk the fruit?
By so doing you put everything at jeopardy,
So no Justification in spite of pardoning.
Karisma, Darling,
Forbidden fruit, is put at stake,
Now, it's rotten fruit,
Rotten and rotten to the core.
Karisma,Darling,
Did I not give you all I could,
Betrayal has clowned all,
Stay,stay I abandon the rotten fruit.
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TobiOrNotTobi
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Is this another poem someone wrote, or did you write it yourself?baley wrote:Karisma,Darling,
Why,why? Did you risk the fruit?
By so doing you put everything at jeopardy,
So no Justification in spite of pardoning.
Karisma, Darling,
Forbidden fruit, is put at stake,
Now, it's rotten fruit,
Rotten and rotten to the core.
Karisma,Darling,
Did I not give you all I could,
Betrayal has clowned all,
Stay,stay I abandon the rotten fruit.
"Grief is deeper when the sun goes down and memories rise up with the moon and stars." - "A Lineage of Grace" by Francine Rivers
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Mashell Chapeyama
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I like the poem. It captures some emotions. It Flows smoothly and the message is put across in a great poetic way.
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TobiOrNotTobi
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Mashell Chapeyama wrote:I like the poem. It captures some emotions. It Flows smoothly and the message is put across in a great poetic way.
Thank you! That means so much to me (considering it's second poem I've written).
"Grief is deeper when the sun goes down and memories rise up with the moon and stars." - "A Lineage of Grace" by Francine Rivers
