Immortally Yours

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Immortally Yours

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Post by asiangirl22 » 12 Jun 2017, 02:43

IMMORTALLY YOURS

I belong to you.

Just like the moon belongs to the night

Along with the stars that are shining bright

I belong to you.

Just like the sun’s undying devotion

My heart’s filled with so much adoration

I belong to you.

Just like the fishes belong to the sea

Every part of you is home to me

I’m yours immortally.

All my dreams,

All my fears,

All my joys,

All my tears,

All that I Am

and

All that I’ll ever be

Are yours for eternity…

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Post by Czarmaine AM » 12 Jun 2017, 03:20

Beautiful! This is what I want to hear on my wedding day. Thanks for sharing!

"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)

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Post by asiangirl22 » 12 Jun 2017, 08:39

Thank you czarmaineam! Honestly, this is the first time I've thought about that. You're absolutely right, this poem is perfect for weddings!

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Post by Jaime Lync » 12 Jun 2017, 21:03

I love this poem. It really does sound like it is for a wedding

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Post by asiangirl22 » 29 Jun 2017, 02:20

Hey, thanks Jaime! Appreciate the kind words

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Post by Mashell Chapeyama » 06 Jul 2017, 09:55

This is a good poem, as it flows smoothly through out. I would suggest the poet would have tied it out with a bit more concrete material. I could deduce that it is about a person one loves, but has no direct indication in the poem.