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Immortally Yours

Posted: 12 Jun 2017, 02:43
by asiangirl22
IMMORTALLY YOURS

I belong to you.

Just like the moon belongs to the night

Along with the stars that are shining bright

I belong to you.

Just like the sun’s undying devotion

My heart’s filled with so much adoration

I belong to you.

Just like the fishes belong to the sea

Every part of you is home to me

I’m yours immortally.

All my dreams,

All my fears,

All my joys,

All my tears,

All that I Am

and

All that I’ll ever be

Are yours for eternity…

by asiangirl22

Re: Immortally Yours

Posted: 12 Jun 2017, 03:20
by Czarmaine AM
Beautiful! This is what I want to hear on my wedding day. Thanks for sharing!

Re: Immortally Yours

Posted: 12 Jun 2017, 08:39
by asiangirl22
Thank you czarmaineam! Honestly, this is the first time I've thought about that. You're absolutely right, this poem is perfect for weddings! :-)

Re: Immortally Yours

Posted: 12 Jun 2017, 21:03
by Jaime Lync
I love this poem. It really does sound like it is for a wedding

Re: Immortally Yours

Posted: 29 Jun 2017, 02:20
by asiangirl22
Hey, thanks Jaime! Appreciate the kind words :-)

Re: Immortally Yours

Posted: 06 Jul 2017, 09:55
by Mashell Chapeyama
This is a good poem, as it flows smoothly through out. I would suggest the poet would have tied it out with a bit more concrete material. I could deduce that it is about a person one loves, but has no direct indication in the poem.

Re: Immortally Yours

Posted: 11 Jul 2017, 23:22
by asiangirl22
Mashell,

Thank you for your feedback and thanks for taking the time to read my poem and sending in your thoughts about it. :-)