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STARLIGHT
Starlight, shining bright

What’s up with you tonight?

Mesmerized by your beauty

For a while, would you stay with me?


Starlight, shining bright

What’s this madness in sight?

Not a long ago, love’s true

And now, we are saying “adieu”?


Starlight, shining bright

For my love, should I fight?

Tell me where did I go wrong

For each other, ain’t we belong?


Starlight, shining bright

What’s up with you tonight?

This afternoon around two

I left the earth to be with you...


by asiangirl22

Good use of end rhymes and repetitions.I suggest you look at the spacing among the lines.I think your poem has four stanzas.For example;

Starlight,shinning bright
What's this madness in sight
Mesmerized by your beauty
For a while would you stay with me.

Starlight,shinning bright
.......
.......
......

I love this piece. It's a beautiful poem.

I like how it uses repetitions and rhyme for word flow.I don't like the last line though.

Hi All,

Glad you like the poem, thanks for stopping by.

Like everyone else is saying, your rhymes and repetition are powerful. I also like the way you frame the questions in the poem. It was also very simple and easy to flow with. Good work!

Vivian,

Thank you for your feedback, it's greatly appreciated.