King Of The Wilds

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Luqman Dawood
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King Of The Wilds

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Hello dear fellows I wanted to share a poem with you. I wrote this when I was in grade four. Lets see if I can get some reviews on my poem But remember i wrote when I was around 9. Lets see if i can make some sense out of this. This poem is for humour.

Once in a jungle
The sun was exploding
The animals were awake
The lion was roaring

Once in a jungle
An elephant fell down
All animals were afraid except,
The lion, So the king wore the crown

Hope you fellows liked it :tiphat: . It wasn't that much of a poem but i felt the urge to share it with you. Bye.
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Nice poem for 9 years old. It's amazing how we remember things we did long ago so vividly though we forget things we did last year completely.

This was my poem, also at age 9.

The wind blew swiftly and strong
As a rabbit ran straight to his home.
As he ran he looked to the sky.
As he ran he wondered why,
The sky was blue but he was grey.
Then he said,
"Why should I worry?
The sky is blue but I am furry."
“I just got out of the hospital. I was in a speed reading accident. I hit a book mark and flew across the room.”
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It is almost comical how deeply analyzed this poem could be. You must have been a very creative 9 year old!
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