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Love Sonnet 135

Our love has thrived above board all the time,
That scribes above would note regards our fate,
Perhaps, we have enough of deeds sublime,
For sure access enjoyed at Heaven's gate;
No need to press review of glorious acts,
Or pester Heaven's keeper with demands,
You have been virtuous, on angelic tracts,
On paths not swerved, and far from reprimands;
Yet should our mirth confront but bolted doors,
We'll wait outside, encamped in desert tents
As would bedouin sheiks and troubadours,
Until all settles to our hearts intents;
.......But even now, with you here by my side,
.......To call it less than Heaven, I deride.

---Reyvrex Questor Reyes

Subject matter is deep,endings are jagged, some rhyme, most don't, which interrupts flow. Content matter is original and unique.

A nice, modern-day sonnet. I liked it Reyes. I especially liked the way you stuck to the classic Shakespearian sonnet form complete with summarizing ending couplet.

Thanks for sharing!

DATo wrote: ↑18 Feb 2018, 07:27 A nice, modern-day sonnet. I liked it Reyes. I especially liked the way you stuck to the classic Shakespearian sonnet form complete with summarizing ending couplet.

Thanks for sharing!

Thanks for visiting buddy, and thanks for the encouraging remark. You have nice literary pieces yourself that I have viewed. Thanks for sharing.

jbeebe8 wrote: ↑18 Feb 2018, 05:49 Subject matter is deep,endings are jagged, some rhyme, most don't, which interrupts flow. Content matter is original and unique.

Thanks for giving me the honor of being your first post. I appreciate and need your critique. Thanks for sharing your time.

jbeebe8 wrote: ↑18 Feb 2018, 05:49 Subject matter is deep,endings are jagged, some rhyme, most don't, which interrupts flow. Content matter is original and unique.

With regards to rhyme, the rhyming scheme is based on "masculine rhyme" or "end rhymes" which a rhyming dictionary could offer a reference for. Thanks, you have noticed.

Correction please: Line #1 and #2 should be punctuated as below:

Our love has thrived above board all the time;
That, scribes above would note regards our fate,

Thank you