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love

Posted: 19 Apr 2018, 03:51
by _Elliotters_
you showed up at time where i felt invisible
to the world and every one around me
but somehow youve been able to slowly
chip away at the walls
that have been stripped apart and rebuilt
time and time again.
its absolutely terrifying,
but exciting at the same exact time
i guess i could explain it as exhilarating
i actually exist in the moment when im with you
my brain storing every moment away for later
just to replay every single moment
over and over again
repeat after repeat.
im scared to open up
but id take the risk for you

Re: love

Posted: 21 Apr 2018, 04:02
by shortguytall
Nice poem. I very much enjoyed the sentiment here. Has a warm feeling to it, and has a good structure to the argument. There's definitely an understanding to poetry here, and I liked the material. Good work.