Yes, good!ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: ↑10 Jun 2020, 20:22Thanks for the edit.Samwisekoop wrote: ↑10 Jun 2020, 18:48Great! This poem is clear and to the point! I think the second line of the first stanza is a little bumpy when read aloud. But otherwise, a very well written poem!ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: ↑03 May 2018, 09:34 My Lord, please set my heart to make amends,
Speak words of truth, not words of one deranged,
Make me so meek towards my estranged friends
Whose tongues, to scorpions' tails have so exchanged;
Let not my pen, be sharper than their swords,
My coat, make not more colorful than theirs,
Give me the wisdom modesty affords,
I'll only act for good, my heart declares;
I drank perfumes to scent the words I spoke,
And closed my eyes to purify my thoughts,
With fettered hands, to burden I did yoke,
And guide my pen to write nothing of naughts;
……My Lord, make me so light where so I pass,
…...Or let me fly, so not to tread on grass.
You seem to have a point there. And a good one. So, how about this:
"To speak the truth, not words of one deranged,"
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Thanks. I am just happy to know there are still good people appreciating rhymed poems.
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
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