The Inherent Ligt

[liftedbooks]

The Inherent Light

There is a certain darkness
A darkness that is transmitted
Through a stare
A touch
A ‘No, please don’t’
And a ‘This will be our little secret’
This darkness
Envelopes many
Dimming the light
The inherent light
A light that is waiting
For an ‘I’m sorry’
‘I didn’t mean it’
‘It wasn’t your fault’
But it doesn’t come
So the light tries
It struggles
Wanting to keep shining
Those memories
The pain
The hurt
So what should it do?
Can it continue?
Yes
Yes it can
And it does
Because you see
Darkness could never dispel
Light
Light is always
Greater
Better
Brighter
So this light
The inherent light
Keeps shining
Because it knows
As it grows
The darkness
Disappears

[_Delly_01]

The subject matter is quite heavy, and you have conveyed it through a perfect amount of dialogue and the word "touch". This is my favourite part of the poem, because you indicate who and what the threat is without indulging in gory details, and choose instead to maintain focus on the emotional conflict of "darkness" and "light" after the horrible event. This shows you have critical thinking in knowing what you want your key message to be, and shows creative intuition in conveying the subject matter gracefully, trusting the readers to understand what it is without going into gory detail.

However, I do feel that some deeper consideration of your word choices and line breaks could bring stronger impact. Regardless, I enjoyed reading your poem.

Thank-you for sharing.