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When I was younger
I coloured outside the lines,
I coloured a tiger blue and purple.
Now I'm older
I colour inside the lines,
I colour a tiger orange and black.
When I was younger
I didn't conform to society,
I was creative and imaginative
Now I follow the rules
It is what it is
'You can't colour a tiger blue and purple'
Why can't I?
It is what it is.

hmmmm... i have heard this idea and several of the lines too many times before
what makes your words and poem different
consider adding more line and originality

Isn't it interesting how free we are as children, but then we grow up and confirm to society says we should be? I still color the tiger blue and purple. It's more fun to be different than to confirm. So much in life is what it is. I enjoyed reading your poem!

palilogy wrote: ↑23 Aug 2018, 10:36 hmmmm... i have heard this idea and several of the lines too many times before
what makes your words and poem different
consider adding more line and originality

Thank you for the advice!

mac83 wrote: ↑23 Aug 2018, 12:06 Isn't it interesting how free we are as children, but then we grow up and confirm to society says we should be? I still color the tiger blue and purple. It's more fun to be different than to confirm. So much in life is what it is. I enjoyed reading your poem!

Thank you! I'm glad you colour the tiger blue and purple still, it's the best way to be, to just enjoy life and live how you want!

That sure simplifies things. I liked it

The rhythm is a little choppy but overall it's a nice poem.

It isn't what it could've been, it isn't what it should've been, it isn't what it was meant to be, It is what it is

I've been thinking about this a lot lately. Nice poem, inspiring introspection.

It’s interesting how freely we could do things as children, now that we reach adulthood we conform to society, but it is what it is. People should be doing things more freely as adults and being who they want to be. I enjoyed reading your poem!

I loved this idea. It reminded me of my childhood. Now, I want to do the things how I used to because It is what it is.

palilogy wrote: ↑23 Aug 2018, 10:36 hmmmm... i have heard this idea and several of the lines too many times before
what makes your words and poem different
consider adding more line and originality

I agree with @palilogy. I really liked the meaning of the poem, but I didn't really feel like your heart was in it. A little more originality would be nice. Otherwise, good job. Btw, there is a really sweet scene in Ramona and Beezus that is similar to this poem. You should check it out if you want..if you haven't seen it already.