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i. And quiet places never seem quite to me
because ticks and tacks always bother me
all the nagging in my head, all the worries
never die down, even if I close my eyes
and breathe heavily, there's always be noise
disturbing noises that only I, can hear.

ii. It's neat, that's what I tell myself
whenever I see a pile of shirts
organized carefully;
by size, by color
no repeat it
by color, by shade
no it doesn't look perfect
why do I have the impulse to do this
no repeat it once more
should I pile it like in the department store?
no I want better than that
I don't want less than perfect
Repeat it
Repeat it
Repeat it
until it's perfect.

iii. I feel something itching inside my skin
it doesn't hurt, but my heart is rapidly beating because of it
I feel discomfort on my nape, all the goosebumps appeared
my worry is on the surface now, my anxiety is arising
did I lock the door?
did I turn off the light?
did I unplugged the television
did I, did I?
did I lock the door?
did I turn off the light?
did I unplugged the television
I need to get up
I need to make sure
I need to repeat it again
I want to be safe
I need to lock the door again even if it's already lock;
to make sure it won't break
to make sure it is safe
I need to, I need to do this things repeatedly
I need to
I want to
I will be safe.

iv. I tried not to wash my hands ten times every hour
but it doesn't seem right to walk around
nor sit in my office with a dirty hands
I tried not to replay the little image in my mind
but it seems wrong not to think of it
I tried to break away from my pattern
doing things against its schedule
but my impulse and obsession won't let me break away
I am sorry
I am sorry
I am soryy
I will repeat it over and over again until you—
accept me and my OCD.

I like it! Mildly amusing, but at the same time it describes the serious side of the condition quite well

There are a few typos which don't necessarily make the poem any worse, but I thought I'd point it out.

Wow. I really enjoyed reading your work. I do not have OCD, but this portrayal in writing makes it relatable. The repetition in your poem was very effective. I noted that you used "Repeat it" and "I'm sorry" three times each. I'm curious that you include four stanzas when I thought maybe there would be three. Is writing four an example of breaking the cycle? Or might it be more effective to write three? Just a thought.

By the way, I don't find it amusing, at all. I read it as a portrait of a very difficult struggle.

There are several typos that take away from the impact of the reading, so you may want to check those.

Again, I enjoyed this poem. Thank you for posting for all to see! Keep putting your thoughts on paper.