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What is wrong with these sentences?
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1) " They feel more robotic than [human]." [humans]
2) "It's not just that they are so competent - it's more [that] the "bad guys" are pretty incompetent." [than]
3) "The text alternates between highly technical descriptions and simplified, repetitive conversations, and the [book stalls]." [bookstalls]
4) "There was also a lot of talk about killing Americans, and what heroes the Iranians thought() themselves by committing these heinous mass murders." [of themselves]
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There is nothing wrong with those sentences as you originally wrote them. Those "corrections" are utterly spurious. Please inform the site moderators about this issue using the contact form.Katelyn Short wrote: ↑04 Jun 2021, 00:56 Hey folks! I'm new here, and my first review was marked as having several errors. I'm trying to learn how I can do better, and honestly, I'm not quite sure what I did wrong. Any input is appreciated! Here is what the notes said:
Editor Comments:
1) " They feel more robotic than [human]." [humans]
2) "It's not just that they are so competent - it's more [that] the "bad guys" are pretty incompetent." [than]
3) "The text alternates between highly technical descriptions and simplified, repetitive conversations, and the [book stalls]." [bookstalls]
4) "There was also a lot of talk about killing Americans, and what heroes the Iranians thought() themselves by committing these heinous mass murders." [of themselves]
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The member should ask for a recheck via the Review Team Page, not via the Contact form.ButterscotchCherrie wrote: ↑06 Jun 2021, 13:02There is nothing wrong with those sentences as you originally wrote them. Those "corrections" are utterly spurious. Please inform the site moderators about this issue using the contact form.Katelyn Short wrote: ↑04 Jun 2021, 00:56 Hey folks! I'm new here, and my first review was marked as having several errors. I'm trying to learn how I can do better, and honestly, I'm not quite sure what I did wrong. Any input is appreciated! Here is what the notes said:
Editor Comments:
1) " They feel more robotic than [human]." [humans]
2) "It's not just that they are so competent - it's more [that] the "bad guys" are pretty incompetent." [than]
3) "The text alternates between highly technical descriptions and simplified, repetitive conversations, and the [book stalls]." [bookstalls]
4) "There was also a lot of talk about killing Americans, and what heroes the Iranians thought() themselves by committing these heinous mass murders." [of themselves]
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Yes, of course, but there's a particular need to draw attention to these wildly inaccurate "corrections".gali wrote: ↑06 Jun 2021, 13:30The member should ask for a recheck via the Review Team Page, not via the Contact form.ButterscotchCherrie wrote: ↑06 Jun 2021, 13:02There is nothing wrong with those sentences as you originally wrote them. Those "corrections" are utterly spurious. Please inform the site moderators about this issue using the contact form.Katelyn Short wrote: ↑04 Jun 2021, 00:56 Hey folks! I'm new here, and my first review was marked as having several errors. I'm trying to learn how I can do better, and honestly, I'm not quite sure what I did wrong. Any input is appreciated! Here is what the notes said:
Editor Comments:
1) " They feel more robotic than [human]." [humans]
2) "It's not just that they are so competent - it's more [that] the "bad guys" are pretty incompetent." [than]
3) "The text alternates between highly technical descriptions and simplified, repetitive conversations, and the [book stalls]." [bookstalls]
4) "There was also a lot of talk about killing Americans, and what heroes the Iranians thought() themselves by committing these heinous mass murders." [of themselves]
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Welcome to the OBC platform. I have to say I'm surprised at these errors the editor marked you down for as none of them are credible by any means. You'll need to ask for a recheck.Katelyn Short wrote: ↑04 Jun 2021, 00:56 Hey folks! I'm new here, and my first review was marked as having several errors. I'm trying to learn how I can do better, and honestly, I'm not quite sure what I did wrong. Any input is appreciated! Here is what the notes said:
Editor Comments:
1) " They feel more robotic than [human]." [humans]
2) "It's not just that they are so competent - it's more [that] the "bad guys" are pretty incompetent." [than]
3) "The text alternates between highly technical descriptions and simplified, repetitive conversations, and the [book stalls]." [bookstalls]
4) "There was also a lot of talk about killing Americans, and what heroes the Iranians thought() themselves by committing these heinous mass murders." [of themselves]
In the second error pointed out, though, I think your use of a hyphen between "competent" and "it's" is wrong; it should be a dash (—), not a hyphen (-). So there's an error in that one, just not what the editor marked you down for. In any case, you can challenge all four of these but make sure to give credible sources online that support your points.
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From your first sentence, it seems that you are saying that "they" feel more ROBOTIC than "they" feel HUMAN.Jachike Samuelson wrote: ↑08 Jun 2021, 02:51Welcome to the OBC platform. I have to say I'm surprised at these errors the editor marked you down for as none of them are credible by any means. You'll need to ask for a recheck.Katelyn Short wrote: ↑04 Jun 2021, 00:56 Hey folks! I'm new here, and my first review was marked as having several errors. I'm trying to learn how I can do better, and honestly, I'm not quite sure what I did wrong. Any input is appreciated! Here is what the notes said:
Editor Comments:
1) " They feel more robotic than [human]." [humans]
2) "It's not just that they are so competent - it's more [that] the "bad guys" are pretty incompetent." [than]
3) "The text alternates between highly technical descriptions and simplified, repetitive conversations, and the [book stalls]." [bookstalls]
4) "There was also a lot of talk about killing Americans, and what heroes the Iranians thought() themselves by committing these heinous mass murders." [of themselves]
In the second error pointed out, though, I think your use of a hyphen between "competent" and "it's" is wrong; it should be a dash (—), not a hyphen (-). So there's an error in that one, just not what the editor marked you down for. In any case, you can challenge all four of these but make sure to give credible sources online that support your points.
If that is the case, the correction has missed the point.