Grammar Mistakes- What did I do wrong?

[dessertqueen]

Hi all,
First, thanks for helping me out! I submitted my first review today and was pretty surprised to have these mistakes identified. Parentheses denote editor's correction. Any insight on why these are mistakes would be appreciated. All four appear to be stylistic choices and not errors to me. I'm usually rather good at this!

1)Beginning with a reunion concert (and) then jumping back to the folk music context of the 1950s and the Trio’s origins, Murphey playfully jumps through Originally "Beginning with a reunion concert then jumping back to the folk music context of the 1950s and the Trio’s origins, Murphey playfully jumps through..."

2)Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much (like) the outsider and for the most part I felt welcomed Originally "Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much the outsider and for the most part I felt welcomed."

3)However, younger readers will have to do their own research to really understand and appreciate some of the political context(contexts). Originally "However, younger readers will have to do their own research to really understand and appreciate some of the political context."

4)Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much the outsider and for the most part(,) I felt welcomed into the Trio's world. Originally "Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much the outsider and for the most part I felt welcomed into the Trio's world."

[Alice Heritage]

Hi all,
First, thanks for helping me out! I submitted my first review today and was pretty surprised to have these mistakes identified. Parentheses denote editor's correction. Any insight on why these are mistakes would be appreciated. All four appear to be stylistic choices and not errors to me. I'm usually rather good at this!

1)Beginning with a reunion concert (and) then jumping back to the folk music context of the 1950s and the Trio’s origins, Murphey playfully jumps through Originally "Beginning with a reunion concert then jumping back to the folk music context of the 1950s and the Trio’s origins, Murphey playfully jumps through..."

2)Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much (like) the outsider and for the most part I felt welcomed Originally "Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much the outsider and for the most part I felt welcomed."

3)However, younger readers will have to do their own research to really understand and appreciate some of the political context(contexts). Originally "However, younger readers will have to do their own research to really understand and appreciate some of the political context."

4)Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much the outsider and for the most part(,) I felt welcomed into the Trio's world. Originally "Murphey's subtle humor and contemporary political parallels kept me from feeling too much the outsider and for the most part I felt welcomed into the Trio's world."

None of those are objective errors, and indeed I think the editor's "correction" to No. 3 introduces an error. PLEASE ask for a recheck - include links to the dictionary definitions of the words you used.

[dessertqueen]

Thanks for your response! I immediately asked for a recheck and the editor affirmed the score. First review, so I don’t know the culture, but I’d assume a second recheck request on the same review would be offensive. I’m happy being assured my “errors” aren’t, and just won’t have high expectations for the future.

[kipper_]

The only ones I could defend here as errors are 2 and 4.

1). The use of “and” is pretty subjective. I wouldn’t count the original as incorrect.

2). I can see where the editor had trouble with this one. The original does read kind of strangely. If you omit the words “too much,” it reads just fine; I’d go with the editor’s suggestion.

3). The change is completely unnecessary.

4). The sentence does sound a bit like a run-on without any use of commas. I wouldn’t have personally chosen to introduce the comma where they did, but I can understand why they marked this one. There are two separate ideas being expressed, and the clauses can also stand alone as their own sentences.

As suggested by ButterscotchCherrie, I would request a recheck (and an admin check, if they insist that these are all errors).