English is tough but can someone help me with what is wrong here
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English is tough but can someone help me with what is wrong here
As I write these thoughts, what in them would you all consider a better sentence:
As humans, we are fallible creatures and much of it due to the struggles we face and our inability to get out of our own way.
2. first an egg, fragile and breakable; then a caterpillar building to become larva;
3. That goal in reaching our conscious mind to self-realization
Where can I find this International Grammer tool?
Thanks in advance for your thoughts.
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1). "As humans, we are fallible creatures and much of it due to the struggles we face and our inability to get out of our own way"
>> "As humans, we are fallible creatures, and mostly due to the struggles we face and our inability to get out of our own way.
2). "first an egg, fragile and breakable; then a caterpillar building to become larva;"
>> "first an egg—fragile and breakable—then a caterpillar becoming larva."
3). "That goal in reaching our conscious mind to self-realization"
>> "That goal in pushing our conscious mind to self-realization"
I can't offer much more without knowing the context of the sentences. Hopefully this helps!
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What do you mean by "our inability to get out of our own way." ?Benitasyanora Yanora wrote: ↑17 Nov 2022, 09:22 Good Morning,
As I write these thoughts, what in them would you all consider a better sentence:
As humans, we are fallible creatures and much of it due to the struggles we face and our inability to get out of our own way.
2. first an egg, fragile and breakable; then a caterpillar building to become larva;
3. That goal in reaching our conscious mind to self-realization
Where can I find this International Grammer tool?
Thanks in advance for your thoughts.