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Should I add an and, change to commas, or leave as is?

Posted: 24 Dec 2022, 06:44
by Stephanie Runyon
Sophia suffered from a dissociative disorder. She displayed four unique personas: Delilah, the sex addict; Neville, the teen who detested males; Evie, the scared child.

I have debated with myself on this. Should there be an and before Evie? Did I use the semicolons correctly? Would there be a better way to write this?

Re: Should I add an and, change to commas, or leave as is?

Posted: 26 Dec 2022, 12:25
by Diana Lowery
Stephanie_Chapman wrote: 24 Dec 2022, 06:44 Sophia suffered from a dissociative disorder. She displayed four unique personas: Delilah, the sex addict; Neville, the teen who detested males; Evie, the scared child.

I have debated with myself on this. Should there be an and before Evie? Did I use the semicolons correctly? Would there be a better way to write this?
This site supports using the conjunction.

https://wmich.edu/writing/punctuation/colon
Series—If one or more elements in a series contain a comma, use semicolons to separate them. Include a semicolon before the final conjunction. (Members of the Western Jazz Quartet are Tom Knific, bassist; Trent Kynaston, saxophonist; Steve Zegree, pianist; and Tim Froncek, drummer.)

Re: Should I add an and, change to commas, or leave as is?

Posted: 26 Dec 2022, 17:51
by Stephanie Runyon
diana lowery wrote: 26 Dec 2022, 12:25
Stephanie_Chapman wrote: 24 Dec 2022, 06:44 Sophia suffered from a dissociative disorder. She displayed four unique personas: Delilah, the sex addict; Neville, the teen who detested males; Evie, the scared child.

I have debated with myself on this. Should there be an and before Evie? Did I use the semicolons correctly? Would there be a better way to write this?
This site supports using the conjunction.

https://wmich.edu/writing/punctuation/colon
Series—If one or more elements in a series contain a comma, use semicolons to separate them. Include a semicolon before the final conjunction. (Members of the Western Jazz Quartet are Tom Knific, bassist; Trent Kynaston, saxophonist; Steve Zegree, pianist; and Tim Froncek, drummer.)

So adding and would make this grammatically correct, but otherwise, I did write it correctly?

Re: Should I add an and, change to commas, or leave as is?

Posted: 26 Dec 2022, 18:43
by Diana Lowery
Stephanie_Chapman wrote: 26 Dec 2022, 17:51
diana lowery wrote: 26 Dec 2022, 12:25
Stephanie_Chapman wrote: 24 Dec 2022, 06:44 Sophia suffered from a dissociative disorder. She displayed four unique personas: Delilah, the sex addict; Neville, the teen who detested males; Evie, the scared child.

I have debated with myself on this. Should there be an and before Evie? Did I use the semicolons correctly? Would there be a better way to write this?
This site supports using the conjunction.

https://wmich.edu/writing/punctuation/colon
Series—If one or more elements in a series contain a comma, use semicolons to separate them. Include a semicolon before the final conjunction. (Members of the Western Jazz Quartet are Tom Knific, bassist; Trent Kynaston, saxophonist; Steve Zegree, pianist; and Tim Froncek, drummer.)

So adding and would make this grammatically correct, but otherwise, I did write it correctly?
In my opinion, yes.

Re: Should I add an and, change to commas, or leave as is?

Posted: 26 Dec 2022, 20:44
by Stephanie Runyon
Thank you for the help and for the resource link.