Grammar Opinion Needed
Posted: 04 Feb 2023, 23:14
New reviewer here. I received the feedback on my first review. I was confused on a few things so ran it by my neighbor, a copy editor (newspaper, not books). She had some guesses but was also confused on a few of the suggestions. Worth a recheck request? Thoughts? The ( ) are all apparently suggested deletions?
Editor Comments:
Two adolescent boys – one the son of a civil war soldier, the other of a Lakota warrior – experience a chance meeting in the woods that grows into an almost (decade long) friendship.
...a period in which tensions took place in the Western United States between a coalition of Native Americans, (westward moving) white settlers, and the United States Army.
Simple illustrations of maps coordinating (to) battle descriptions are included, allowing the reader a visual understanding.
The reader awards (the) rating of 3 out of 5 stars.
Editor Comments:
Two adolescent boys – one the son of a civil war soldier, the other of a Lakota warrior – experience a chance meeting in the woods that grows into an almost (decade long) friendship.
...a period in which tensions took place in the Western United States between a coalition of Native Americans, (westward moving) white settlers, and the United States Army.
Simple illustrations of maps coordinating (to) battle descriptions are included, allowing the reader a visual understanding.
The reader awards (the) rating of 3 out of 5 stars.