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Are these sentences grammatically correct?
2) The author is trying to demonstrate to young impressionable minds that it is ok to think differently and how the parent needs to support a child’s innocence.
3) It teaches them to be inclusive of all family members irrespective of age or gender.
4) This book also shows how a parent can be the binding glue in the family’s harmony and togetherness.
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Hi,Nisha DSouza wrote: ↑15 Feb 2023, 11:51 1) We have all been there, trying to find a book with values, knowledge, wisdom, and of course, a great moral.
2) The author is trying to demonstrate to young impressionable minds that it is ok to think differently and how the parent needs to support a child’s innocence.
3) It teaches them to be inclusive of all family members irrespective of age or gender.
4) This book also shows how a parent can be the binding glue in the family’s harmony and togetherness.
Were there particular questions you had about these sentences? Here are my thoughts on the first two.
#1 It may seem like a lot of commas, but for clarity, I would recommend a comma before the interrupter “of course.”
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma-with-interrupters
#2 It seems that “young” and “impressionable” are coordinate adjectives. If so, consider adding a comma between them.
https://prowritingaid.com/coordinate-adjectives
Also, it is a bit unclear if the author is demonstrating both things (that it is ok to think differently and how the parent needs to support a child’s innocence) to young impressionable minds. This Purdue Owl link has great examples of parallelism that may give you ideas for rewording this sentence if necessary:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... cture.html
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Oh, I see. And you're very welcome.Nisha DSouza wrote: ↑15 Feb 2023, 21:32 I asked this because I got marked down on these sentences in my review and was given 0 out of 40 for these errors. I wanted to understand if these were really that big errors. Thank you for the explanation.
3) It teaches them to be inclusive of all family members irrespective of age or gender.
4) This book also shows how a parent can be the binding glue in the family’s harmony and togetherness.
I didn’t notice anything amiss in #4.
I am assuming #3 was highlighted because of a missing comma before “irrespective.” If so, that is a tough one. There are several confusing sources regarding how to punctuate a prepositional phrase at the end of a sentence. Basically, it comes down to the writer’s intent. I don’t think a comma is required in this case, and this link also supports not having a comma:
https://linguaholic.com/linguablog/comm ... egardless/
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Sorry for the delayed response. I was a little low the last couple of days because I was banned for plagiarism incorrectly. I wasn't sure if I was allowed to post things here. But I was reinstated today after an appeal, thanks to an admin recheck. ☺
Thanks again for the links you have posted. I will use them for my future reviews.