A Short Poem

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thirddd
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A Short Poem

Post by thirddd »

Here's a short poem I recently wrote, let me know what you guys think!

Standing tall so far from grace,
Foul trees crowd this hollow place,
Their arms they rise from darkest space,
Both black and blue and filled with hate,
Yet still their reach is upward bound,
When fate would have them seek the ground,
For life is found both up and down,
Their leaves look up,
While roots, they drown.
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Post by Ant »

Well thought out, I would have liked a second verse. :D
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Post by Twilight_2_Midnight »

I respect the darkness of it all, as it has something in common with the message I usually put across in lyrics for my songs/poems. Loving your thoughtful description, maybe write some more? :)
"I was still sitting there, waiting to die, waiting to fossilise, waiting for the coffee in the kitchen to evolve enough to make a cup of itself and bring it through to me, when the phone rang."
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Post by jasperellis »

It wasn't a really great poem.
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Post by sabilamalik »

thank you brother, its really nice and heart touching, great sharing, appreciated
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Post by softprerna »

Its really nice and heart touching poem...:)
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Post by kaderontor »

I respect the darkness of it all, as it has something in common with the message I usually put across in lyrics for my songs/poems. Loving your thoughtful description, maybe write some more? :)

-- 02 Oct 2012, 14:00 --

I respect the darkness of it all, as it has something in common with the message I usually put across in lyrics for my songs/poems. Loving your thoughtful description, maybe write some more? :) :lol: :)
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Post by rintubiswas »

kitne dino se ye asman bhi soya nahi hai isko sula de..
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