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cliche


As a timeless beauty,
saturated by the art of love.
Gilded by tranquility,
and the grace of a dove.

A tragedy once written in stone,
now beats with a heavy heart.
clouded in misuse,
while reflected in a shard.

It pains her to confess,
when her voice only shakes.
to the provocative music,
that her heart truly makes.

Sara Lindeman

Here's the easiest - watch your punctuation and capitalization. F'rinstance take one period and one, no two commas out of first stanza.

hard for me to understand. Is your subject the "her" in the third stanza? The "her"is the 'timeless beauty of the first stanza?

I'm completely baffled by the second stanza.

In the third stanza does it pain her to confess to the music in her heart or does her voice shake to the music?

A very lyrical poem. There was something that reminded me of Emily Dickinson's style in it. Is she an unseen and unknowing coach? What poets inspire you?

Hi All Avid Readers and Writers,
Just joined and looking forward to sharing with all of you !

Carolyn