FEEDBACK WANTED! Limerick that I wrote.
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Cnc_theft_auto
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FEEDBACK WANTED! Limerick that I wrote.
Hi.
This is my first and only limerick so I'd like some feedback please.
Thanks.
This is my first and only limerick so I'd like some feedback please.
Thanks.
There soon will be a strong gale,
And there’ll also be lots of hail,
So I decided to stay
But my house blew away,
And then I decided to bail.
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Cnc_theft_auto
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Thanks guys, but I gotta say this is definitely not one of my best...not even close!
"Desperation is your enemy's best weapon." - Me
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DATo
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Hark! The hail and the gale doth arrive!Cnc_theft_auto wrote:Hi.
This is my first and only limerick so I'd like some feedback please.
Thanks.
There soon will be a strong gale,
And there’ll also be lots of hail,
So I decided to stay
But my house blew away,
And then I decided to bail.
Do not tarry but seek to contrive,
A stout stalwart bark,
Such as Noah's famed Ark,
For who bails in the hail shan't survive.
*Wink* [; -)
“I just got out of the hospital. I was in a speed reading accident. I hit a book mark and flew across the room.”
― Steven Wright
― Steven Wright
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clintessential
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Twas in Spain for a remedy
for bones on the wane.
In a venue so homely,
it seemed rather plain.
The soil was parched
And in need of some rain.
When the heavens delivered,
It was a thunderous refrain
Smiles were abundant throughout
the domain.
But the drops felt like needles
On this ancient frame.
When asked to locate it
Or give it a name,
I refer to the cypher
that used it to train.
-- 10 Oct 2012, 23:38 --
My Love Is Like ...........
My Love Is Like A Dimpled Cheek,
That grows deeper with red in
for bones on the wane.
In a venue so homely,
it seemed rather plain.
The soil was parched
And in need of some rain.
When the heavens delivered,
It was a thunderous refrain
Smiles were abundant throughout
the domain.
But the drops felt like needles
On this ancient frame.
When asked to locate it
Or give it a name,
I refer to the cypher
that used it to train.
-- 10 Oct 2012, 23:38 --
My Love Is Like ...........
My Love Is Like A Dimpled Cheek,
That grows deeper with red in
You can only be grounded if you're crazy. If you come to me and tell me you should be grounded because you're crazy, I won't ground you.
Why not: Because crazy people don't think they're crazy.
Why not: Because crazy people don't think they're crazy.
