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I Am Who I Am (My First Attempt at Poetry)

Posted: 05 Apr 2011, 03:39
by Aileenhu
Okay, so I wrote this poem. I personally don't think it's very good, mainly because I usually "say" I hate poetry.


I Am Who I Am

I am who I am
I am the breeze, the skies and the seas.
I am no state
I am the wonder of the world
I am the best riches
I am the darkest corners of an ocean
The deepest part of a tunnel.

I am what humankind seeks for
I do not exist
More of a state of being
One that cannot be found
Or lost
Or made and destroyed

I am the missing
One who cannot be found
I am the eternal
I am what all seek for
Yearn for.

I am the space between the sun
The lines of a textbook
The claws of an eagle
The laughter of the children.

I am the Unknown

Posted: 05 Apr 2011, 04:26
by Fran
Aileenhu .... I think that poem is very good & I like it a lot :D

Posted: 05 Apr 2011, 07:55
by Scottaleger
:)

Hey Guy , It is a nice poem that is written by you ......

Posted: 06 Apr 2011, 06:26
by Nullifygirls
Brilliant I don't believed that it your first time because you write very well.

Posted: 08 Apr 2011, 19:14
by Aileenhu
Thankyou! :)

...and yes it is my first time.
Ail.

Posted: 29 Apr 2011, 02:41
by Teesie
Wow, your a natural. Keep writing, I'm already a fan! :D

Posted: 29 Apr 2011, 21:47
by Aileenhu
Thankyou Tessie. :)

Posted: 29 Apr 2011, 22:26
by Butterbescotch
It's quite good but who/what's the Unknown?

Also your poem reminds me of something I have read in the 7 Habits Of Effective Teens. (Don't read the last line or you'll spoil the excitement) :lol: :lol: :lol:

Who Am I?

I am your constant companion. I am
your greatest helper or heaviest burden.
I will push you onward or drag you down
to failure. I am completely at your command.
Half the things you do you might just as
well turn over to me and I will be able to do
them quickly and correctly.

I am easily managed - you must merely
be firm with me. Show me exactly how you
want something done and after a few
lessons I will do it automatically. I am the
servant of all great individuals and, alas, of
failures, as well. Those who are great, I
have made great. Those who are failures,
I have made failures.

I am not a machine, though I work
with all the precision of a machine plus
the intelligence of a human. You may run
me for a profit or run me for ruin - it
makes no difference to me

Take me, train me, be firm with me,
and I will place the world at your feet. Be
easy with me and I will destroy you.

Who am I?
I am Habit. (Highlight this line) :wink:

Posted: 29 Apr 2011, 22:29
by Aileenhu
A lot of things are the Unknown.

7 Habits of Effective Teens...never heard of it, but I'll have a look...

Posted: 27 Jun 2011, 07:33
by Cowboy14
wow great , today it would be my fb status :p

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Posted: 30 Jul 2011, 04:48
by Daffo12233
well done,you have good writing skills keep writing.

Posted: 31 Jul 2011, 06:58
by Inspiro Assistant
Aileen you inspire me to post my poetry too! I use to write poems when I was in college and it stops. But I have compilation and I have to find it now.

Posted: 01 Aug 2011, 16:25
by Kdor11
I love it! Great job...just like 'Inspiro Assistant' you have inspired me to post some of my work, thanks!! :wink:

Posted: 02 Aug 2011, 03:17
by Inspiro Assistant
I already posted one ;-)
Kdor11 wrote:I love it! Great job...just like 'Inspiro Assistant' you have inspired me to post some of my work, thanks!! :wink: