"Dog Eat Dog" by Joy Meehan
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"Dog Eat Dog" by Joy Meehan
What do you think of this story? What do you like most about it?
I enjoyed the descriptive and funny writing style. I like when a writer can really make me feel like I am there. I loved the switch from the third to the first person.
My favorite quote:
Why did she force us to draw caricatures of her that absolutely had to include narrowed eyes, pinched lips, a pitchfork and horns?
What do you think?
"Non ignara mali miseris succurrere disco." Virgil, The Aeneid
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Karma....wow! I think everyone has worked with someone that they wished had the tables could be turned turned on them in this fashion.
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I have to agree with the minor criticism but I was under the impression that Elaine was a plant and didn't even belong there which made her a corporate spy of sorts.bookowlie wrote:I just finished this story. I thought the twist was very inventive, and I certainly didn't see it coming at all. I enjoyed the switch from Elaine in the first person to Pam in the 3rd person; it gave me a chance to see things from both of their perspectives. A few minor criticisms - I thought it was unrealistic to call the head of the company in the middle of the night and for security to make Pam get down on the floor.
Regardless, if you've ever worked in an office, which I did for sixteen years, there's always a Pam in the mix. I've known several of them, one of which was particularly evil since she was picking on a guy who had MS and told my boss that she didn't want me helping him anymore. That set me off and I told my boss that I wasn't going to stop and I wasn't going to be her hatchet man. My boss merely walked away. But, oh how I wish this woman had met someone like Elaine.
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference.
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"The Road Not Taken" by Robert Frost
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Now I am intrigued!lovejoybr wrote:Thank you for the opportunity to discuss my story. I appreciate hearing all comments and feedback. There is some hidden symbolism in my choosing of the characters' names and I was wondering if anyone had picked up on it. Looking forward to hearing more from everyone! Cheers!
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A minor criticism was the wording seemed a little awkward at the beginning of the story where the author was setting the conference room scene.
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I was slightly disappointed with the ending. For some reason I really wanted both Pam and Elaine to receive punishment. At the end I really just felt sorry for Pam and lost all disgust for her.
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I loved the dual viewpoint as well--as a literary technique, brilliant. I did NOT find anything sympathetic about Pam at all, despite reading from her (albeit third person) perspective. I did see Elaine as an anti-hero, but I loved it. She may have been conniving, yes, but come on--Pam had it coming.
I'll be the next to say on here that I have had supervisors like that. Oh Lordy. Revenge on those types is pure fantasy from where I sit. Thank you for that story, LoveJoyBr.
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They slither among us, serpentine, scaly, and pure evil.bookowlie wrote:It's funny how many of us have known someone like Pam.
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Pam, however, chose to let her hate and anger take over which was, ultimately, her undoing. As mentioned in this discussion, many of us have known someone like Pam, but what differentiates us from them, is how we deal with what is going on in our lives. Do we take our anger out on other people? Or blame the innocent for our lot in life? Do we roll with the punches or focus on what didn't go as planned? Pam had such disregard for the feelings of her team because they were simply standing in the way of her ambition. She was blind to their own motivations; Elaine's in particular. The choices Pam then made are what led to her downfall.
On the flip side, my intention was not to make Elaine come across as either sneaky or underhanded. Instead, I needed her to bide her time and gain Pam's trust (or least allay Pam's suspicions). Her allegiance, from the first, was always to her paycheque and the anonymous client to whom she was selling the company's secrets. I made Elaine an observer at first, on purpose. She was on the receiving end of Pam's malice but indirectly. Elaine needed to be powerful, but not overtly so. Also, despite her competence and intelligence, she was powerless to do anything about Pam - as is the situation of many employees under a bullying boss. And so, Elaine waited and watched until the perfect time to finish her own work while also, finally, being able to exact justice for her team.
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You raise interesting questions in your second paragraph.
I wanted to add another praise for your story: there was somewhere in it where your descriptions of Pam were spot-on. I think it was the line you wrote about being slithery as a serpent. It just nailed Pam.
You never told us about the names! Didn't you say there was symbolism or something regarding the characters' names?