If you could change one thing about the book?
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Re: If you could change one thing about the book?
I would make it longer. I would also allow the main story start quicker and remove unnecessary details from the book.Erandi Ekanayake wrote: ↑01 Oct 2020, 08:37 Imagine you were given a chance to change one thing about the book. It could be a person, an event, a decision, a course of action, or anything else.
How would you use this opportunity? Or do you think the book is perfect as it is?
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I would also change the structure and add some chapter numbers to make it more clear that the chapter has changed.
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This could point to a problem of focusing on too many characters, which I think was an issue. When a story has too many major characters, building the many characters may result in the story losing its appeal.gabrielletiemi wrote: ↑02 Oct 2020, 06:59I also thought about Galen seeming to be very one-dimensional, but the development of some other character is great. So I think it's something that happened because the author wanted to cast more light in some characters in this book.xsquare wrote: ↑02 Oct 2020, 04:16 I think the book could have done with a lot more character development. I know that this is only the first book, but it felt like the characters were rather one-dimensional? Galen doesn't even seem to be too affected by his experiences living in a war-torn country, and we didn't get to see more of Rowan's other traits besides him being 'mischievous' and 'playful'. I think if we had gotten better character development it'd be easier to root for them in the coming books too.
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