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Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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thisgirl818
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Here we go again, snowflakes and misery
I miss you everyday since you've been gone
And I haven't been okay, no not for a long time
Maybe one day I will or maybe one day I'll never be
I don't know, all hope is lost for me
Cold December winds, I hate those
And I miss the days where you said
"Stupid girl, I'll be you Knight and warming jacket"
"I'll never let you go, you'll never be cold anymore."
Indeed how stupid I was but it was warm and tempting
So I walked in and came close to you
I created this dream for our own little world
A dream I wish you could see right now.
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Post by timur777 »

Sad poem. I could feel it through your well written poem. It means you did a great job with the delivery. Continue writing!
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This would make a beautiful song. I've felt these emotions.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!
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Post by Tobewankenobe »

It seems like this poem goes with others on a certain topic. It's nice seeing the progression of the loss of love in this way. It makes something that's so sad into something beautiful, as well.
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