New here,feedback please?

[eden]

This is my first time writing a poem. so here it goes

Tonight we celebrate
For the love that we create
As our passion that burns like a fire
We dance until our hearts desire

The moonlight shines above us
As the cold wind embrace us
We can hear the angels sing
as we conquer everything

We defeated our foe
And our love continue to grow
Our vows will last perpetuity
Our love will last for eternity

what do you think guys?

[Fran]

Very nice & uplifting .. I like it, well done

[Ant]

I like the way it's put together but it's a bit soppy for me.

[Carla Hurst-Chandler]

Very nice. Positive

[Maud Fitch]

Strange but I think it's about saying good-bye, almost as in immortal life after death.

[Carla Hurst-Chandler]

I can see that.

[eden]

thank you for your reviews guys..

Strange but I think it's about saying good-bye, almost as in immortal life after death.

yep it's something like that..

[bookgator]

We defeated our foe
And our love continue to grow
Our vows will last perpetuity
Our love will last for eternity

Is it just me or something tells me that this poem is about love and death. It made me a bit sad but it doesn't mean I don't th poem or something. I think the poem moved me and made me reflect on whatever experience I had in the past. Cool poem.

[Cheryl Rendone]

I enjoyed reading this, very good job! I do have a few critics though. Did you mean to leave an "s" off of any of the words, like "winds" and "continues". Just an idea, I thought it might flow better. other than that, I enjoyed it!

[Nathrad Sheare]

I think it's impossible this is your first time. Wonderful.