Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?
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Re: Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?
It did feel like I was reading next to a commentator.evraealtana wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 07:16 A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
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Not exactly perfect, mind you, but better.evraealtana wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 07:16 A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
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They could have been used to hide secret clues to how huge some information in a chaptervmight be, and in that case, the author would have had to use it quite sparingly.Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 21:17It did feel like I was reading next to a commentator.evraealtana wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 07:16 A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
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It does not sound lame, just different and unexpected.DC Brown wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 09:49This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑01 Jun 2019, 08:54 From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
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I completely agree with you.evraealtana wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 07:16 A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
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For me, the giving away partvof the story was annoying.IloveSpain01 wrote: ↑09 Jun 2019, 14:52 I personally wasn't bothered by them, even if they gave away a bit of the story. Since almost every chapter chapter changed scenes, the author may have felt it was needed.
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For me, the giving away part *of the story was annoying.Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑10 Jun 2019, 01:33For me, the giving away partvof the story was annoying.IloveSpain01 wrote: ↑09 Jun 2019, 14:52 I personally wasn't bothered by them, even if they gave away a bit of the story. Since almost every chapter chapter changed scenes, the author may have felt it was needed.
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True, it felt like I was being educated on the scenes in the book. It's never wise to assume your readers are stupid.
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But it just wasn't for that only, it was done in every chapter highlighting menial things the protagonist did.DC Brown wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 09:49This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑01 Jun 2019, 08:54 From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
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Yes, yes that is true. The only one I appreciated was that first one. By the end of the book the others were irritating as well. For me, though, they were not the most irritating of all the things that irritates me about the story.Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑11 Jun 2019, 23:41But it just wasn't for that only, it was done in every chapter highlighting menial things the protagonist did.DC Brown wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 09:49This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑01 Jun 2019, 08:54 From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
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I completely agree with you.DC Brown wrote: ↑12 Jun 2019, 09:54Yes, yes that is true. The only one I appreciated was that first one. By the end of the book the others were irritating as well. For me, though, they were not the most irritating of all the things that irritates me about the story.Ferdinand_otieno wrote: ↑11 Jun 2019, 23:41But it just wasn't for that only, it was done in every chapter highlighting menial things the protagonist did.
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