What changes you would make in the book, if you were the author?
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Re: What changes you would make in the book, if you were the author?
I agree 100% with this. The instant attraction between two strangers isn't very believable. And Sky was an odd duck, to say the least. He seemed to hover between madly in love and possessive.
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I agree with you, but besides your corrections I will eliminate the contradictions that exists between characters profile and their personality/normality of things. For examples, Cynthia is one of the people involved the cyber war but yet lack basic knowledge like dangers of unprotected sex and the use of abortifacient.Jo689 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:17 I was actually thinking about this:
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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With how impressive Cynthia's job was, you would think she would be smarter in every day life! That would be a great change to the book!Jo689 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:17 I was actually thinking about this:
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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I feel like the pregnancy did nothing for the story! If Cynthia hadn't had the miscarriage, then I feel like it would have made more of an impact. But then she would have a reason to stay with Sky, which I wish she wouldn't do either...
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Sky was just awful! The fact that Cynthia ends up with him is so frustrating to me.AntonelaMaria wrote: ↑08 Jun 2019, 12:53 Well, I really didn't like the book so where should I start with the changes? I mean this is a big question. Probably would make Cynthia a bit stronger and smarter as a leading character and Sky less of a mr.know it all and creep.
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I agree with you. I'd make the story more about Cynthia and Dan. As for Cynthia, she's just a character. There are people like that in life. LOL.Jo689 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:17 I was actually thinking about this:
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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