Official Review: Once Dream by Rylene Irvin

[Nikolas Farmakis]

[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "Once Dream" by Rylene Irvin.]

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1 out of 4 stars

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Once Dream by Rylene Irvin is a fictional story about a person who had mental illness but recovered because of music. The story is extremely short, so the author briefly describes how the mentally ill person found mental stability.

The author introduces the story by describing how a man named Dr Russia asked three groups about their careers. Group 1 mentioned music, Group 2 mentioned dance, while Group 3 said singing. The mentally ill person belonged to Group 1. The author refers to the mentally ill person as ‘client’ throughout the story. The client discovered that he liked the keyboard, so when he played the keyboard, he felt happy. Later in the story, the author mentions that there was a contest between the three groups. Will the client’s group win the contest? How will the client be delivered from mental illness, so that he becomes mentally stable?

I liked nothing about this book, as it was terribly written, appallingly edited, while it lacked creativity, imagination, and it was extremely short. More specifically, the story was only three pages long, which means that it significantly lacks content and ideas. The author should use what she has written as a skeleton to create a larger story. Moreover, the author failed to create a logical structure in her story, as the ideas in her book were not logically coherent, meaning that her story confuses the reader. Additionally, the author’s language was very poor, as the author failed to convey emotion, suspense, and tension in her writing, thereby creating a boring and monotonous tone. Furthermore, what I disliked most about this novel was that it contained a vast number of grammatical, typographical, and spelling errors. Even though this book is only three pages, it contained approximately thirty errors, making the book incredibly hard to read. The book should undergo at least two more rounds of editing so that the errors are removed.

This book is best suited to readers that enjoy fictional stories related to mental illness. The topic of the story revolves around mental illness, so readers interested in mental illness are more likely to enjoy reading this book.

Selectively, I rate this book with 1 out of 4 stars. This means I do not recommend this book to anybody, as it is a horrible book. I gave the lowest rating possible because the author has not developed her ideas adequately, while she also creates confusion in the story.

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[Miller56]

Thanks for the review. It appears this book could use a lot of work before I would want to jump in and read it. This could be such a great topic to write about since mental illness is so prevalent.

[Stephanie Elizabeth]

Sorry, you had to soldier through such a disappointing book. Thanks for the honest review!

[kandscreeley]

Well, it sounds like it has potential. It's too bad it's not realized. I hope the author takes your advice to heart and revises this.

[Marsnikk]

This storyline has potential, it’s too bad it didn’t work out.

[Nikolas Farmakis]

Thanks for the review. It appears this book could use a lot of work before I would want to jump in and read it. This could be such a great topic to write about since mental illness is so prevalent.

Yes, it definitely needs a lot of work to improve, but it has some good potential in it. Thank you for taking the time to comment.

[Nisha Ward]

For such a good idea, one would think there would be more than three pages. I hope the author reads this and takes it to heart, because it has potential, particularly with regards to the influence of music on mental health, but it needs to be developed way more than this.