Memories

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Jacktone Ogada
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Memories are the driver's of our lives. Great piece.
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I think you had better split line 4,

Memories like works of art
Hanging on the walls of a Gallery
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And line six too...
We can make new and happy ones
Starting from now.
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The imagery in your poem was fantastic. I am a fan! Continue to make more, I can't wait to see them.
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:D :D Thank You
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Your poem made me realize that memories are often taken for granted and that I should try to make as many memories as possible
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My family and I dedicated the song, Memories, by Maroon 5 to my grandfather who recently died.
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sunflowerchild2020 wrote: ↑22 Jun 2020, 17:05 Your poem made me realize that memories are often taken for granted and that I should try to make as many memories as possible


I'm glad it did. I'm trying my best to make more memories too. Cheers to making better ones. :D
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yapashley wrote: ↑03 Jul 2020, 09:24 My family and I dedicated the song, Memories, by Maroon 5 to my grandfather who recently died.

So sorry about your grandfather :( :( . Thankful for memories that allow us to also keep our loved ones in our hearts.
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