Comma usage (or lack thereof)
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Comma usage (or lack thereof)
1. Vincent Panettiere’s A Woman to Blame is written in third person omniscient, but more often than not follows the perspective of Mike Hegan, a Chicago police detective.
The editor has suggested adding a comma after 'more often than not', but I'm not too sure.
2. The action picks up somewhere around a third into the book and from then on, it’s a ride to solve the mystery and find the real killer.
Again, a suggestion to add a comma between 'book' and 'and from then on'.
3. The conclusion also felt a little lacking, and there were too many loose ends which I thought didn’t get a proper resolution.
Another suggestion to add a comma after 'loose ends' and before 'which'. Personally, I do think this sentence is a little problematic, but I would replace 'which' with 'that' and leave the comma out of that part of the sentence entirely. (Admittedly, I'm also not too clear on the usage of 'which' vs 'that'.)
What are your thoughts? Thanks in advance!
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Here’s a handy link for that vs. which:
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/which-vs-that/
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I really think American English is evolving to use fewer commas. Fewer commas is a more modern style; it makes the writing more direct and active. I do copyediting and some style guides say to use fewer commas, especially in academic writing (which our reviews aren't, but they are non-fiction). The suggestion of these guides is to add a comma only when it makes the meaning clearer.
In my job as a copyeditor, I would have been dinged for using all those commas.
Sample a few recently published books and you'll see what I mean in the authors' writing. All the books I've read here so far use the more modern style.
It seems to me to be a matter of style. I would like to know what Scott thinks about this. Is this a matter of style and personal preference, or do we need to adhere to the strict guidelines of clauses and comma use?
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In sentence 3, "that" would be better than "which."
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Yeah, the first sentence is also the one that gives me the most pause. Unfortunately, I'm not too sure what exactly is the technical name for this kind of sentence so I can't find identify the exact error, even if I did request for a recheck.CatInTheHat wrote: ↑19 Jul 2020, 17:21 I would agree with the editor on both 2 & 3. I'm not sure about the first one...
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I'm not quite sure where the adverbial is in 2; do you mind highlighting it for me? For 3, removing 'which I thought didn't get a proper resolution' leaves a sentence that still makes sense, but I thought it was an important clarification – to be fair, I probably should've used 'that' instead of 'which'.Mr_Wimbaum wrote: ↑19 Jul 2020, 18:09 I agree with 2 and 3 also. Both examples are adverbials. They’re extra information that can be removed from the sentence while still ensuring it remains a complete sentence.
Here’s a handy link for that vs. which:
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/which-vs-that/
Thanks for the link! It was quite helpful.
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Interesting point! I learnt English mostly from reading (usually books of the modern and fictional varietyAlexisLib wrote: ↑19 Jul 2020, 21:00 I would have written those sentences the way you did.
I really think American English is evolving to use fewer commas. Fewer commas is a more modern style; it makes the writing more direct and active. I do copyediting and some style guides say to use fewer commas, especially in academic writing (which our reviews aren't, but they are non-fiction). The suggestion of these guides is to add a comma only when it makes the meaning clearer.
In my job as a copyeditor, I would have been dinged for using all those commas.
Sample a few recently published books and you'll see what I mean in the authors' writing. All the books I've read here so far use the more modern style.
It seems to me to be a matter of style. I would like to know what Scott thinks about this. Is this a matter of style and personal preference, or do we need to adhere to the strict guidelines of clauses and comma use?

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This is your sentence:xsquare wrote: ↑19 Jul 2020, 23:13I'm not quite sure where the adverbial is in 2; do you mind highlighting it for me? For 3, removing 'which I thought didn't get a proper resolution' leaves a sentence that still makes sense, but I thought it was an important clarification – to be fair, I probably should've used 'that' instead of 'which'.Mr_Wimbaum wrote: ↑19 Jul 2020, 18:09 I agree with 2 and 3 also. Both examples are adverbials. They’re extra information that can be removed from the sentence while still ensuring it remains a complete sentence.
Here’s a handy link for that vs. which:
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/which-vs-that/
Thanks for the link! It was quite helpful.
The action picks up somewhere around a third into the book and from then on, it’s a ride to solve the mystery and find the real killer.
This is with the adverbial removed:
The action picks up somewhere around a third into the book and it’s a ride to solve the mystery and find the real killer.
It still makes sense as a complete sentence, but the extra clarification is needed with the adverbial. All it needed was that extra comma before it’s
Hope that helps
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