One of my poems

[Inspiro Assistant]

This is the poem I write when I was in college. I just use ordinary words. Feel free to give me a comment.

YOU are the one I use as my tool
In building my dreams in the world so cruel
You make everything so perfect to me
Makes me smile and happy

You're always there every time I need you
Following my commands in all I want to do
We sing together, we strum together
We painted dreams with each other

You wipe my tears, you stroke my hair
We never fall apart, we're always near
If you are taken away from me, I'll be mad
We're so inseparable, 'cos you are my HAND

Do you guess the title? Yes, it's "Hand"

[Kevin9]

Awesome poem is written by you, such a great word of mixture in this poem really impressive words speechless to say about your poem.

[Kdor11]

Very well done! I like the type of poem where the inspiration is revealed in the end

[Inspiro Assistant]

Thanks Kevin and Kdor! I've written that 11 years ago and just keep it. Your words gave me confidence. Thank you guys!

[Robin jackson]

YOU are the one I use as my tool
this line is amazing loved it
title should be Mad love

[Cheryl Rendone]

Great poem!! I'd like to guess that the title is "you"?

[princesskhym]

I must say this is a great poem you wrote. The last line is my favorite!

[tmoore1990]

Lovely poem. Simple, yet it's deep enough to keep me wondering until the end.

[tennent10]

I like the variation of words, it's really good. It got the point across and it wasn't to long, nor to short. Very good.

[RisingDownfall]

I wasn't expecting the twist at the end. Good job!

[ryancody]

Well written...I love reading love poems a lot and you wrote lovely.

[NakedSoulPoet]

Love the twist at the end. Nice write

[amen jamir]

Lovely poem!

-- 27 Jun 2014, 10:16 --

Lovely poem!

[Genaaa]

This is actually really cool as the whole poem came together at the end.

[revna01]

Poems are such a personal thing, thank you for sharing. You did a great job and be didn't reveal the title to the end, which was a nice twist.