Wandering Off

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

Wandering Off

He was lost in reverie, walking aimlessly.
Then he saw a sign: 'You are entering Heaven'
But he was jolted to reality all of a sudden,
Stones have started falling like Hell.

Out of habit, or plain inquisitiveness
He noted where the stones are coming from
And started towards that direction.
And he came to a boundary sign: 'Hell'

And surely enough, he saw some devils.
And the cartload of stones that they pushed.
'So this is where the stones are coming, eh? '
He shouted to one devil, with some reproach.

'But we have to eat, sir' the devil answered.
'You mean eat these stones? ' he countered.
'No sir.' said the devil. 'We throw these stones
to the other side and they come back as bread.'

[Libs_Books]

That's extraordinary! I really like the concept.

[Lincolnshirelass]

Hi, Revyrex, I see your thoughts, like mine, are wending towards the hereafter ... and I think that was a lovely and thought-provoking poem. I am also reminded of a Chinese legend I once read - basically, a man goes to hell, and discovers there are the most delicious meals imaginable, but the chopsticks are far too long to use - the old notion of being tantalised. Then he goes to heaven and discovers the same chopsticks, and is told 'but here we feed each other'. Of course, my practical side says, they could've used their fingers! But allegorically it's a good point, though distracting from your poem, which will certainly lodge in my mind.

[desantismt_17]

Wow, that did not go in anywhere near the direction I thought it would. Very thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

That's extraordinary! I really like the concept.

Thanks, just glad that you liked it.

[Radex316]

It has a great theme, but it lacks any real poetic edge. Perhaps it should have been more appropriate presenting this as an anecdote.

[DATo]

Loved the twist! [:- )

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

It has a great theme, but it lacks any real poetic edge. Perhaps it should have been more appropriate presenting this as an anecdote.

I agree. And I foresee it won't look well being rhymed.

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

Loved the twist! [:- )

Thanks, buddy.

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

Wow, that did not go in anywhere near the direction I thought it would. Very thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.

Thanks for commenting. I thought it would look like I snubbed you not having acknowledged your comment when those of the others I had.

[Samwisekoop]

Was it just me...or was the ending kinda funny?! Was it meant to be humorous? Either way, I really liked the whole thing. I especially liked the third stanza. Well done! May I ask what provoked this poem?

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

Was it just me...or was the ending kinda funny?! Was it meant to be humorous? Either way, I really liked the whole thing. I especially liked the third stanza. Well done! May I ask what provoked this poem?

I could not remember the verse and article number, but I think it's in the Sermon on the Mount.
Jesus admonished the believers that "if someone throws stones at you, you must throw back in return bread." Thanks for commenting.

[ReyvrexQuestor Reyes]

Was it just me...or was the ending kinda funny?! Was it meant to be humorous? Either way, I really liked the whole thing. I especially liked the third stanza. Well done! May I ask what provoked this poem?

But you know, in a deeper sense, I intended for this poem to be a lampoon of poetry. In painting, after all the masterpieces of the masters, circa the Renaissance period, there arose in Europe a movement called "Dadaism" which is a painting style in total disregard of the painters' discipline. Imagine painting in contrast to the way Da Vinci or Michelangelo painted. To get the idea of what I meant, see the paintings of "Abstract" artists. Salvador Dali and Pablo Picasso were also along these lines of the heretical style of painting depicting scenes far removed from reality. And back to poetry. I wrote just ordinary prose and pass it off as poetry. See what I mean? That's why we have now free verse, and you will be appalled sometimes of seeing whole paragraphs of writing as poems. Alas, the rhymes are being killed, as a new style, or just failure to rhyme?

[Samwisekoop]

Was it just me...or was the ending kinda funny?! Was it meant to be humorous? Either way, I really liked the whole thing. I especially liked the third stanza. Well done! May I ask what provoked this poem?

I could not remember the verse and article number, but I think it's in the Sermon on the Mount.
Jesus admonished the believers that "if someone throws stones at you, you must throw back in return bread." Thanks for commenting.

Oh, okay! So its like a "heaping coals onto someone's head" kind of thing?

[Samwisekoop]

Was it just me...or was the ending kinda funny?! Was it meant to be humorous? Either way, I really liked the whole thing. I especially liked the third stanza. Well done! May I ask what provoked this poem?

But you know, in a deeper sense, I intended for this poem to be a lampoon of poetry. In painting, after all the masterpieces of the masters, circa the Renaissance period, there arose in Europe a movement called "Dadaism" which is a painting style in total disregard of the painters' discipline. Imagine painting in contrast to the way Da Vinci or Michelangelo painted. To get the idea of what I meant, see the paintings of "Abstract" artists. Salvador Dali and Pablo Picasso were also along these lines of the heretical style of painting depicting scenes far removed from reality. And back to poetry. I wrote just ordinary prose and pass it off as poetry. See what I mean? That's why we have now free verse, and you will be appalled sometimes of seeing whole paragraphs of writing as poems. Alas, the rhymes are being killed, as a new style, or just failure to rhyme?

Oh! Okay, I get it. But, I still liked the prose-like writings you posted, even if they are different. It is refreshing to have lots of different kinds of poetry, just like there are many forms of art. Btw, what do you mean by the last question?